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  1. #1
    Take a Dose of my Codes Ragian's Avatar
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    RAW

    I'm a stupid genius and a retarded scientist
    I'm paradoxical like slowly getting faster
    Fuck a master I'm a walking disaster never pressing backspace cuz I'm the ace and I don't need to own the place fuck a competition it's just me vs myself
    And I don't need help you will let me down down shout out to Rise Against Like The Angel I think with my heart and feel with my brain
    Yo thas so insane
    Pause...
    Tick tick tick what shall I say?
    I'm so sick what the fuck rhymes with sick?
    I don't want to say dick cuz thas gay
    Never fucked a faggot but made one suck my dick
    Oof
    Yes I'm ashamed of it
    I guess the truth hurts but hey no one's perfect
    I stop and think... why do I need to stop and think again?
    Hey YOU do you wanna be my friend?
    Cuz right now I only got two friends
    My Mom and my Pops
    And fuck the cops they can't stop my rhymes
    It's not a crime to rhyme like mine
    Raw.

  2. #2

    Re: RAW

    Got to get that vocab up a level or two, bud. Try equalising the length of your bars, it'll make them easier to read. You had some pretty good internals in this though. Multi-syllable rhymes help the flow of the piece as well.

    Keep perfecting.

  3. #3
    You've Earned a Custom Title! Lady Poet's Avatar
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    Re: RAW

    This isn't bad
    Well written
    Rhyming Scheme

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